学生实例2
分数：23.5分 岳池中学
Dear Henry,
I have known that a Chinese paper-cutting exhibition whose subject is about Chinese festivals will be held in our city.
Knowing that you have a great interest in Chinese traditional culture, I am writing the e-mail to invite you to visit the exhibition together with me. The exhibition will be held in the museum from 9a.m. to 7pm. on June 15th, which will last for only one day. On that day, the works of paper-cutting artists from all over China will be exhibited in the museum. Just as I have told you, it is about Chinese traditional festivals. Therefore, in the exhibition, not only can the skills of these paper-cutting artists be enjoyed, but also you can know more about the customs of our Chinese traditional festivals from these beautiful works.
Time permitting, please contact me. I am looking forward to visiting the exhibition together with you.
Yours,
Li Hua
1. 覆盖了全部要点，使用了较多语法结构和词汇;
2. 没有明显语法错误;
3. 硬伤：主题句不够突出;
4. 句式套用比较生硬：例如：not only but also; time permitting…
学生实例3
分数：22.5 吉林 磐石一中
Dear Henry,
Our school will hold a paper-cutting exhibition. It's a great honor for me to invite you as a special guest. Paper-cutting is an indispensable style of art. Therefore, I hold the opinion that this show is of extreme significance.
Main points are as follows. To begin with, it will start at 9:00 on 15th Jun and last for one week in our auditorium. Besides, a wide range of activities will be held, including the competitions between different classes, which will be the highlight of this show. Last but not least, taking advantage of this golden opportunity, we can not only enhance our understanding of Chinese indigenous culture, but also enrich our cultural life.
All in all, I'm longing to see you soon.
1. 覆盖了全部要点，行文流畅
2. 结构清晰，使用了较多复杂的语法结构和高级词汇;
3. 个别连接词,过渡句使用有些生硬、突兀。例如：Main points are as follows.
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